Haiku

A new can of Spam
Pink gelatinous meat blob
I ain't eating that

Love it! :)

:: curtsy ::

Choosing employment
"Do art" said no one ever
I should have listened

Keep it simple Stu
Let the great ideas Flo
Quick and content Rich

Discussion forums
are not the place for haiku!
Art and words don't mix.

Of course I'm kidding.
After all, I started this.
I can't turn back now.

A fact in my house
Pet hair found in the kitchen
Is a condiment

Liz Truss for P M?
I don't think so any more
She's gone: close the door!

Why Five, Seven, Five?
I do not understand it.
Call me a numbskull.

Why Five, Seven, Five?
A mystery, it is true...
How it's always been.

Why iambic pentameter?
Why Alexandrine rhyme-schemes?
Why Limericks?

Write an Alexandrine Haiku Limerick anybody?! :)

Bright sunshine abounds
Summer flowers soon grow tall
Bees gather pollen


What's in a picture
Can you see the spirit there
Or linger awhile

Laughter lifted me
from the depths of broken dreams
Friends, dear treasured Friends

Can I forget you,
even now that you are gone?
I still dream of you.

Words appeared, useless
Reading now seemed tiresome
Sleep and dreams beckoned

Because I kissed you
I am forever broken
Never again love

Where is my pencil?
I need to make a drawing
And color it pink.

Wrote a poem today,
the best I've ever written.
Now I can't find it.

Five, seven and five
Is English language haiku
Not so in Japan

I didn't know that, Susan. What is the pattern there?

Two roads to follow:
I chose the one less traveled,
changing everything.

(With apologies to Robert Frost!)

Clever Tom spoke out
Attracting much attention
But sadly all left

Jon, there are actually quite a few rules to writing a real haiku besides the misguided syllable counting (which tends to make them too long by Japanese standards), which is a far cry from what we're doing here, and despite its simplicity (or perhaps because of it) it's actually considered fairly difficult to do well... and with good reason.

These sites will explain it better than I can without writing a missive:

https://www.nahaiwrimo.com/why-no-5-7-5
https://thehaikufoundation.org/some-thoughts-on-line-and-syllable-count-in-english-language-haiku/

And if you want to get really serious about it:
https://www.tofugu.com/japan/haiku/

Thanks! I'll check them out.

I've actually always liked the sparseness and discipline of having to work within the 5/7/5 parameters. But I'll be interested to see what the next levels are.

In the meantime, I'm thoroughly enjoying the thread, both reading others' posts and getting to write my own.

computer light room
publishing my photographs
wishing they would sell

My attempt at something a bit more traditional in the technically required nature theme (and 5-7-5 cuz English, but I did try for more brevity)

At morning's first light
the garden begins to sing
as day comes to life

oh, treacherous time...
"childless cat ladies" comment,
from puréed mind comes

Running out of ink
Running in many circles
Now dizzy she stopped

Hurry Up! she cried
It is not acceptable
To be very late

Tanka

In uncertain times
I breathe, drawing strength inward,
drawing lines between
the needed and not needed.
There's no fiddling while Rome burns.

 

Yapping, yammering
Old fussbudget still at it
Such a tiresome wretch.
 

Spewing vitriol
Couch cushions and cat ladies
Not much to go on.

 

Control was the goal
Understanding was long gone
In the end, she lost

from zest to ashes
mi bambino, hope you knew
how much I’ve loved you

Crickets together
Rhythmic sounds a lullaby
Summer's night music

The grumbles increased
Louder and louder, closer
And they ran faster

Ideas whisper,
Silent canvas waits for dreams,
Colors find their voice.

The choices were few
Some tubes of paint were empty
The pallet too bland

Boxes everywhere
Totally unorganized
Let's start unpacking

The incessant sound
Of the ringing telephone
Was rudely ignored

The four sat waiting
Hoping someone would stop by
Everyone had left

 

Me and my shadow
Companiable silence
Now, and zen, is good.
 

Splitting the darkness
everlasting abundance
continuous pour

Looking everywhere
The lost items had vanished
Into the thin air

What is happening?
Puzzle pieces didn't fit
Gave up in dismay

So many stories
Unknown Tribulations
My compassion grows

Hidden stories shared
We have this in common now
Burden lightens some

Seven noisy crows
Screeching, cawing, while chasing
The big red tail hawk

Rain began softly
But then the strong winds picked up
Hurricane arrived

Chickadees calling
And waiting for an answer
Sorry, no one home

while reading haiku
counting every syllable
never read a word

Ah, words thrown into
Cyberspace - gone, forgotten
Through the winds of time

And where should they look?
Under all the furniture?
In every corner?

It's not there -- give up
They could now search forever
And still -- it is gone.

gathered dust bunnies
hidden under the guest bed
building fuzzy forts

I exist right now
It is as real as it gets
In my world now