State the vision, give the document rhetorical punch #36
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| Our vision is for a World-Wide-Web that is more inclusive, and more respectful of its users and particularly their privacy. A Web that supports truth better than falsehood, people more than profits, humanity rather than hate. | ||
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| We will improve the fundamental integrity of the Web platform. The Web will not only grow in scope and importance in our lives; ; it will grow in respect for its users, grow in the trust of its users, grow in its inclusion of all humanity as its users. |
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You should have an "and" after your last comma.
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no, it's a set of parallel constructions, I prefer it without, it has more punch. Imagine delivering it as a speech, with passion. (Extra semi-colon being excised).
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That works, now that it's not a sentence fragment.
| * socially responsible and committed to ensure that the Web is for everyone; we greatly emphasize accessibility, internationalization, privacy, security and diversity. | ||
| * committed to developing open and royalty-free standards with high focus on interoperability and collective empowerment. | ||
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| These define the global brand of the W3C. |
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I'm not sure this sentence is even necessary?
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It was the lead-in to the three bullet points, so I was hesitant to delete it.
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Meh. I think "Identity" is clear enough. I'm okay either way.
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Overall, I like the changes and the change to a more directive tone. |
Merge pull request WebStandardsFuture#36 from dwsinger/main
I've tried to make this more into a rallying cry, something that could (should) be inspiring. Also, it lacked a vision statement of what we foresee, what we are trying to bring about.